Monday, October 5, 2020

Metaphors And Finally Lift Off

            

On the Writing Elephant                                                                   

Finally on the Writing Elephant!  



 Write Your Own Metaphors 

There are times you might like to use a metaphor.  Several metaphors have been used repeatedly, such as soft as a cloud or quiet as a mouse. ( I quit using that last one when a fourth-grade student said that mice were not quiet.  They made so much noise in her dresser drawer she could not sleep at night.)
Be original. Make your own metaphors.  This is my method. (Not original with me. I read it someplace.)

Write a list of concrete nouns, then write a few adjectives associated with each noun or a phrase.

chair         sturdy, hard, four-legged
Blue Jay     noisy, raucous, chattering, harsh sounding, twitter
Moon  reflected light, phases of light, distant, round, close appearing
Dog  barking, snarling, dashing, running, chasing its tail, lap sitting
Violets   purple, white, small, green leaves, scent
Gnome  silly looking, dwarf-like, red hat, mystical, mischievous
Pillow   soft, fluffy
Towel  absorbent, soft, rough
Grey clouds    ominous, forbidding, large, low hanging, spiraling.
Children   laughing, arguing, cranky, slurping, riding bikes, naughty, nice, ill-mannered, well mannered, bratty, talkback. 
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Next, make a list of other nouns and pair them up with the adjectives and nouns on the first list, or use a noun from your story that you want to pair with your list. 
(A character's name) absorbed the insults like a paper towel.
Her mood was like ominous gray clouds.
Outside the window, the blue jays argued like cranky children.


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This will be the last blog on writing unless you are thinking of publishing.  There will be one more blog for those who wish to continue.

A few last tips as we settle ourselves on the elephant and lift off in the writing balloon to new adventures.
First, I need to clarify something I posted earlier.  Adverbs are frowned on especially ly words by agents and publishers, but if your character uses adverbs in his speech than a ly word is appropriate.  Sorry for the misinformation.

I have always had trouble with certain words.  When do I use lie or lay?  When should I use an apostrophe in its?  I took my little demons and wrote them on index cards and taped them together into a flipbook. At a glance,  I know lie means to rest. The past tense is lay, the present participle is lying, and the past participle is have lainThey never take an object Examples:  My dog lies on the floor.  The baby lay among the pillows on the sofa.  There is no object in the two sentences.

Lay means to put something someplace.  The past tense is laidThe present participle is laying, and the past participle is have laid.  They all take an object.
Pam laid her books down. (books are the object and laid is the past tense of lay.)
Please, lay your books on the desk.  (books are the object and lay is in the present tense).

It's equals two words, it is  It's ten o'clock now.
Its means possessive; it owns something.  If I am writing about a lake,  I would say its water is green.

When I read a novel and find words and phrases, I like I copy them onto a list.  They give me inspiration on how to turn a phrase.  And some words do not easily come to mind, such as folderal or snoggled.

Dialogue tip:
"He said, "Come here."  Notice the comma is not inside the quotation marks, but the period is.
"Come here, " he said.  Notice the comma is inside the quotation marks, but the period is not. It is at the end of the sentence. 
Remember when a different character than the previous one speaks begin a new paragraph.

If you think you will want to do more writing and enjoy it, I recommend the program for your computer called Grammarly,  It does cost money, but it does a much better job than the computer spell-check.  You pay for it once, and that is it. You download it on the computer.  It will pop-up and help with your emails and  Facebook as well. 

For those interested in next week's blog, it will be on themes and outlines.  I struggled with these two concepts but have found a way that I can do them with ease. 

Those who wish to stop here, let me know if the blogs have been helpful.  I would like to see what you have written, even if it is not finished or in a rough draft.  If you send me your work, I will send you a free copy of my short story on the Gnomes and Trolls.  Wow!  What a huge offer.  There is no better deal anywhere.  I'm sure you will agree.  The tale does not have a good title, so please submit your suggestions.  If I choose your suggestion, I will send you a free copy of my latest book, Slaves of Passion.  Double Wow! 
You can always email me to talk, make suggestions, have questions, make comments.  Love to hear from you.

Ready to LIFT-OFF!



                                                                       LIFT-OFF!  
                                                                 
                                                            You did it.  Congratulations!  




Pat
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